Wednesday, 18 September 2019
Day 1: da best library
Happily, a little boy was reading a book so much he got sucked into that specific book. He looked up to have a rest from reading but suddenly he saw something rather extraordinary. This was no ordinary library. He heard some fluttering in the distance he saw these books flying gracefully like a bird. she was shocked for a split second. he looked back in his book there were no more writing left on the page. rapidly yet carefully the little boy flipped the pages there no letters no writing she looked up his book he was reading was about legends and tale's that have been told. She saw colossal dragons unicorns mythical creatures she even saw Maui!! This day for sure had to be her one of favourite days.
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Hi Jiraiya. Well done on using -ly sentence starters to begin your writing. It is also great to see you continue to use adverbs throughout your writing. Could you find a way to describe the fluttering a bit more? Suddenly the pages started to flap, colliding with each other.. could you use some sound words? Next I would like your to proof read your writing to check that it makes sense. Also, capital letters need to be corrected. Great work, Jiraiya.
ReplyDeletethank you for the feed back Mrs Mills
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